Wednesday 14 September 2016

Cross country

Lining up to race, boys and girls shouting everywhere. I felt
sick lining up with some of the fastest people in our school like, Lucas, Jessie and Brady. “On your marks get
Set” bang! The clappers went, running heart pounding wind blowing on my face; it’s a beautiful day I say to myself it’s so sunny.I was coming 9th with Carl in front of me and Jake behind.


Zooming out of the wetlands still coming 9th about to pass Carl who is breathing heavily slowing as I cross the car park running across the hill then down then back down the hill and at the start of the wetlands I did that all again then the third time through the wetlands I overtook Carl and sprinted to the end.So over all I came 8th I say as I fall to the ground.

By Braden

15 comments:

  1. Braden even though you came 8th you did a pretty good job I came 36th you did a good job than me

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  2. Braden even though you came 8th you did a pretty good job I came 36th you did a good job than me

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  3. Nice writing and good job off coming 8th

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  4. Good to see you incorporating complex sentences, Braden.

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  5. Braden nice piece of writing good to see your happy and putting complex sentences in you did a good job of coming 8th i came 16th

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  6. good job on coming 8th,I came 28th.Is that a big improvement for you?

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  7. You put a nice piece of writing there

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  8. good job on coming 8th,I came 28th.Is that a big improvement for you?

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  9. Nice job on coming 8th I came 10th.

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  10. No I came 5th last year.

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  11. No I came 5th last year.

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  12. nice work you were vs hard people.

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